…But can you really have them all at once?
More from English 484, coming right up! In keeping with the course’s focus on the revision and reimagining of a piece, this story is a quasi–sequel to “Bread and Buttons“ from two weeks ago. This time, the prompt offered several routes, from adding new scenes to approaching the same theme from a radically-revised angle. I chose the option which essentially worked out as a composite of both those examples: changing the POV (point of view) character. This time, it’s from the perspective of Dawn “Won” Brooke: Dan’s older sister, bittersweet inspirational figure, and Arch-Manager of RobotNews!
Despite being a companion to Dan’s narrative (taking place the same day as he’s moving out with his wife), it can (hopefully) be read on its own without confusion; I tried to keep the same style and themes, but explore them from the perspective of a slightly older woman. Needless to say, Dawn is not quite the carefree model of success Dan regards her as–but as her younger brother moves on, maybe she too will experience the…
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It’s a nice accompaniment to the previous piece; you’re definitely writing what you know, perhaps too much so – there are a looooot of name drops that aren’t ALL needed to show that Dawn is a game journalist.
That said, I enjoyed her irresponsible decision to politely tell the CoD article guy to screw off. Made me smile. I think this story as a whole did a better job of introducing a short internal conflict and seeing it resolved. Insecurity, affirmation, some blend of the two… g’jorb.